Sit Tight, Human Warship Incoming | Best HFY Stories

That term bio-organic, You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means.

"The fighters are fast, but lack discipline" "the capital ships work as a hive mind, in great efficiency".... pick one. Hive mind half organic half tech species, high is stratagy and efficiency, or independent fighters that lack proper skills and just rely on numbers. Ai writing at its best.

Must have been a wild party afterwards 🫡🍻

Whatever crappy A/I wrote this story needs a tune-up. The verbatim repetition of a few phrases is exactly what you'd expect of a programmed machine, instead of a creative mind. And certainly didn't pass the desk of any editor.

Continuity is questionable. Marines dropped to the ground when the void was herding civilians into enclosures, then the marines get bogged down with two enemy soldiers and so what happened to the civilians being held?
Stories you have done in the past were better. You are slipping. Proofread before you post.

The humans having SUPERIOR tech?? Well, that certainly turns the usual sci-fi story on its head.

A suggested mod for a reposting. The VOID WARRIOR that was captured and medically attended to became agitated and confused at the people of LORPA PRIME saving his Life. Since the warriors of the VOID are telepathically linked, the LORPA implanted a device in the Warrior during his recovery. The device caused the linked minds of ALL VOID WARRIORS to CHANGE and become much less hateful and less violent. The faith of the LORPA in the rehabilitation caused the VOID military to collapse completely. The VOID leaders find themselves without military forces to command, sue for Peace. The VOID leaders fearfully realize that carnage they caused on LORPA PRIME could consume THE VOID'S GNP ten time over for a hundred cycles in war reoarations. When the LORPA PRIME government and civilians decide not to ask for war reparations, the VOID is stunned. Who ? How ? Why ? Their plans for a retaliatory guerilla strike dissolve totally. The rifts are healed, both societies change/grow/share as they become partners in a rebuild. Peace and Prosperity for ALL triumphs !

narration excellent- story great-- thx

What ever wrote this has no idea of the real world

Sorry but, narration here or there... was the actual story composed by or with the help of AI? Because at around half time it stops making sense, sentences repeat... like at the first volley they destroyed the flagship, it was depicted as such, biggest. Aliens paused at the destruction of their leader. And suddenly 5 minutes later the Admiral asks for a strike at the Flagship? Same description as before, but shields are different? And the fighters, so... weren't there enough names to depict a squadron? Or is the weapons officer the pilot of the fighter too.... not to mention why an existing Fighter name like the F22 Raptor... I enjoy stories that are actually written by humans better...

Unfortunately when AI write stories they keep using set keywords over and over again which does my head in it seems the AI just cannot help itself with it's limited ability of the English language words like " determination, resolution his " hands always " dance over a keyboard"

Why do I keep thinking of Capt. Zap Branigan?

They should have had boots on the ground long before the admiral's decision was actually made.

This one contained some of the usual space story chliches that have been hitherto grateful not to expect from you. I still give it a like.

Aliens: "Commander, our SOS was received, but there's an odd sound in response."
Alien Commander: "Put it on speaker."
Human transmission: (Free bird playing)

A human may be reading this but the store is written by AI. The first giveaway is indomitable that is a word that AI uses exclusively in all their stories. There's continuity errors and plot holes all over the place. First off the other human ships just magically show up out of nowhere no mention of them showing up or anything. The same phrases repeating over and over classic AI writing. And all the extra writing and it contributes nothing whatsoever to the story. It's OK as far as AI stories go I guess. I have heard a lot worse AI generated stories.

Nice.

Apparently Admiral Bailey is played by Patrick Warburton.

Way WAY to many adjectives. Who wrote this? Charles Dickens. I've read a ridiculous number of books across so many genres in my decades... overuse of adjectives is just trying to pad a story out. Like spices, use them sparingly to enhance a story, not bury the flavor.

You don't need to tell us a soldier is "clad in" every single time. After the 1st time the reader gets it. Insects don't need to be described as having chiten every single time they are mentioned. Or mandibles. We were equipped at birth with parallel liquid cooled organic self configurable super computers. We are capable of remembering and inferring.

Good base for a story. Start over, though, and cut through the fluff to the actual story. Flesh that out without filler words.

I'm sorry but the reader had me laughing out loud as I envisioned Fawlty towers reading the script....

The story starts with the Lorpa being overwhelmed. Desperate. 8 minutes in " the tide of battle seemed to be turning against them." SERIOUSLY. Someone read this rubbish, and EDIT IT.

I'm just laughing every time the story claims the Void's "bio-organic" (redundant terminology BTW) is "more dureable" than mineral based armors. The whole reason we use metal is because our penetration power has far exceeded tue capabilities of any organic-based defense. Those bio-organic ships would be incredibly squishy, like breaking open oysters.

Meh! This story is just more regurgitated, copy, and paste drivel that has been told over and over and over again. Nothing about this story or even the narration is original nor is it unique.

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More adverts than story. So annoying!

The f22 is the baddest thing in the sky that we currently know about. But it's not space capable... Haha

Awful lot of grim determination and steely eyes. Reminds me of the pulps of the 1950's.

am I missing something? bio-organic sounds redundant.

couple hundred year, but the 22 finally got to ace lol

For the same reason NATO forces that were under attack in Afghanistan always thanked God when and American QRF force was coming to their aid. Steadfast resolve.

It's funny af how much AI takes from Star Trek when coming up with images.

The Kid finally intercepts😂

Less than 2 minutes in and there's an ad. Not gonna even finish this.

Nice job on the narration.

"Kif! Prepare for battle! Iron my formal shorts!" 😆

Story sounds like it was written by a 15 year old

F-22s are not atmospheric craft, but okay.

i like your reading but the storys are 3ed rate

I genuinely kinda hate the "where every star tells a story"; I feel like you guys don't need a slogan.

.......too....flowery...too...embellished....too sickly sweet.....

I unlike others enjoy these stories for their entertainment and enjoy them. They are getting better all the time. I do hope that these stories will get longer. Some of them should have part 2 and even more. Great story. Keep it up ❤.

There is repetition in some phrases.

This story felt rushed and fiat. It could just be me, but it felt like a filler episode of an anime 😔 🤷‍♂️

Same reason why French troops in Afghanistan said if your ever really in trouble pray you have American with you. We have a reputation for moving Heaven and Earth to help our friends

That is a perfect sci fi example of:
"Private, do you see that hill?"
"Yes Sir!"
"I don't want to."
"Yes Sir!"

Wow this is where the Llorpa And Voit came from?! Now i wanna hear how Ms Rimiki met her human husband

Precision, "indomitable", determination. The leitmotifs and a typical presence in AI generated text. It's okay if you hear it once or twice, but these are in almost all AI stories.

What strategy would you use against the Void's relentless swarms?